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I pray for wind
to press air into my depressed lungs,

for a gust
to blow my mind,
removing the black clouds,

for a gale
to push me forward,
out of this airless,
lifeless state of mine.


I am
nothing but a dried leaf,
crumpled on the ground.

Please god, breathe
your breath of live
into me (again).

Let me dance
on the invisible wings
of your power.
This is my entry for the #Dreamers-Welcome challenge of July: Wind
Luckily the deadline has been extended until today, so I am still in time :)

Fun fact: Did you know wind is exactly the same word in German? There's only the little difference we Germans write all the nouns with a big letter at the start. So in Germany it is actually Wind.

-> See the challenge here: fav.me/d6bw8fk
-> See all the other lovely entries: dreamers-welcome.deviantart.co…

Air  is not your element?
Try one of those then:
Earth
Water
Fire
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Zevais Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist
i curse the air
for leaving my expanded thoracic cavity,

for the retch
that spits out my heart,
providing the burning white smoke,

for the cough
that pulls me back,
into this thick air,
that animates everything beides me.

i am not
anything but damp weeds,
climbing up toward the sky.

i've had enough demons, suffocate
these empty lungs and kill
this flesh (once and for all).

don't keep me here
gripped by black talons
of my weakness.
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think I haven't found the time to thank you for this mirror up to now, so thank you and have a merry Christmas and a happy new year! :hug:
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EmmyIsAZebra Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful! I'm not a great critiquer of poems or anything like that. But it certainly captivated me. 

This was my favorite part: 

Please god, breathe
your breath of live
into me (again).
 

You did a great job! :huggle: Sorry it took so long for me to write that. 


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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :hug:
This is a beautiful comment and I do not mind waiting for those a little longer at all ;)
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EmmyIsAZebra Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I hope to see more wonderful work from you in the future! :icontardhugplz:
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :squee:
haha, that is kind of the funniest hug ever!
But I couldn't figure out how exactly using those plz-thingies work. So for now :tighthug:
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is very beautiful. I like how you go from the literal to the figurative and then when you look at it a certain way it can be flipped and interpreted differently, but either way it still holds the same meaning and to me sounds almost motivational. Amazing job!
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for your wonderful comment :hug:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing job. :iconclapplz:
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :blush:
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