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They
encourage me to keep my hands in the scorching fire
- just a little longer -
until I find a better, safer way to roast my food.

And no,
blisters on my hands
and pain in my mind
is not a reason to quit that job.

I should rather develop a proper resistance against fire,
they say.

How much longer
do you suggest I wait?
Would third-degree burns be sufficient?
Or do you want me to go right down to the fourth, bones turning to ash?


You know those can kill, don't you?

...

But you and they forgot:
the bones important here
are not those in my hands.

My backbone snaps back into place,
redrawing my hands.

There's more than enough food,
which I can digest
without roasting.

My mind, freed from pain, will find plenty.
And it will taste so much sweeter
without the bitter burned skin.
To those peeking in from the outside, thinking they figured you all out, telling you what is best for you, denying your own thoughts. To those that tell you to "hold through just a little longer" when you know this is the last exit you can, must take to survive, to live.
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is really interesting!
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :tighthug:
You do have a knack for picking the pices important to me :D
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure! :)
:giggle: Those are the pieces I save to leave good comments. ^_^
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Zevais Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Hobbyist
no one
prevents me from being out in the cold when the frost bites
- even right now -
everything is wrong, i'm not safe and i am starving

and yes,
chill beneath my feet
and numbness that reaches my heart
are my reasons to just give in.

there nothing you can do to fight the cold,
i knew.

i can't wait
there is no time left!
i freezing to my core but it doesn't seem to be enough...
was i wrong for wanting to rise up, my skin is becoming the ice...

i just wanted to live, did i ever?

...

i just have to remember:
my skin is of no importance
not when i have my feet.

my sternum cracks open from the cold,
i step forward.

there nothing left for me to taste
only i will starve
in this chill.

my heart, incarcerate by numbness, is emptying.
and the sensation is just so bitter
to any sweetness reaching to my insides.
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This really is an amazing mirror thank you very much :hug:
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sacredZinja Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's a very nice metaphor, I really like it! And I can understand the feeling so well... strange, how hard it is sometimes, to find the strength and trust yourself, not all these other people...
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
(I wouldn't exactly call it a "nice" metaphor, but I get what you meant. ;))
Strange ain't it? How we easily trust others to make more competent judgements about ourselves.
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sacredZinja Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, "nice"... I thought about that word, but was too tired to think of something better. ^^

One reason for that may be: we know all our own faults. (Even the ones we didn't make, but were close to. The stupid thought. The doubts...) We don't know that about other people. So they seem trustworthy, at least the ones who are not in big trouble theirselfes... you know what I mean?
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yes, this really might be one of the reasons. Your ideas here make a lot of sense to me. Might also be low self-confidence in general adding to it.
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sacredZinja Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
And also a bit a female thing. At least, I often have the feeling that men are faster in saying: "Whatever, I am right."
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