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Humans inherit habits and traits
like animals pass on fur patterns.

They stick,
tighter than fur, closer than skin,
just above the flesh marred with battle scars.

We judge each other by colours
– not every leopard is a panther –

and habitual fur is so difficult to strip.

Who can see
deeper than skin, past blinding patterns,
into the heart of the best possible version of our selves?

Which hands can pet hearts
instead of raw naked flesh?

Can't we
colour our own fur,
change bad habits into ornaments
and recreate patterns as required,

not like chameleons that forgot their own true colour while adapting to peer pressure,
but like butterflies, becoming what we were meant to be from the beginning?
This is an answer poem for xXI-Feel-InfiniteXx's poem 3. Family.
To me her poem was about how our parents influence our behaviour in relationships, which is the point from where I started this answer poem.
I hope she likes it :)
What does this poem make you think/feel if anything?
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sacredZinja Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Really, I want to become this butterfly...
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Eclosion is tough business, but I'm quite sure you'll get there. :huggle:
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sacredZinja Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I have to! It might be alright to live as caterpillar, but you cannot live pupated, too afraid of using your wings. So, when you started to change, you have to go the way, I guess.
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laurotica Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014   Writer
You've got some great images here, I really enjoyed it :)
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :)
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Kagi-13 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014
It made me feel more peaceful when I read it, actually.
More at home with my own decisions and my own self, I guess.
Though when I read "like butterflies" I just had this moment of ". . .no." ^^'
Butterflies are not a creature I relate to well, haha.

Loved this piece.
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I have been thinking about whether or not to use the chameleon and the butterfly here (cause hey, they don't even have proper fur!), but they fit so well with the ideas I wanted to express in those two lines.
Maybe you just weren't meant to be a butterfly ;)

I am very happy it made you feel more peaceful. Thank you very much for your wonderful comment :huggle:
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Kagi-13 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014
Yeah, the butterfly metaphor really does work really well there. No, I probably am not, haha.

Thank you for writing beautiful things!
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's just filled with wisdom, and the analogies make so much sense
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I feel flattered that you actually read wisdom in my poem. On the other hand, that you read wisdom in this maybe doesn't say that much about me, but maybe more about you as a (wise) reader being able to see it.
Thank you very much for you comment :huggle:
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